Dear: Mr. Tetzlaff, the current state of the playground is really dangerous.
First of all, the poor choice of color and material is really poor and risky. if someone were to trip and fall, they'd go straight to the Sick Bay. Maybe you could've gone with something softer than steel?
Secondly, there's absolutely no fairness. The junior playground is massive, its even decked with a rock climbing wall, a few small square huts, and most importantly a massive circular tube!
Don't even get me started on the middle school playground.
They have so much stuff that I can't even list them all off! They have a swing, an obstacle course, a slide, and a spider web!
Thirdly, its very boring. Not only the color scheme, but the actual contents are boring! All there are is 2 risky heights which keep in mind, are restricted. and some monkey bars...
Lastly the heights are unrestricted, in the playground you could be pushed by a kid at any moment. By the way, if you're on duty look under the rock climbing wall in the senior playground.
Hi Jai, I can see that having a new playground would mean lots to you. There are lots of positives in this piece of writing:
ReplyDelete- You've used firstly, secondly, thirdly to introduce new arguments
- You've explained your thinking by telling the reader what would happen to students if they were injured. You've also given examples of what equipment the middle playground has.
Here are some recommendations for you:
- Since you are sending this letter to the principal, it may be better to use formal language rather than everyday language. (Think of the difference in the way you speak to a friend and a teacher).
- You can include a conclusion where you can make a recommendation on what the new senior playground should look like and ways that you can fundraise for it.